I loved this. You description of skiny, jumpy Connor was heart hurting, and Dawn's teenaged lack of sympathy was in character and totally in voice.
This scene made me laugh: "Just stop it, okay?" Dawn snarled, twisting around on the couch to glare at where Connor was half-inside the curtains, peeking out at the street and twitching every time somebody won something on The Price is Right. Poor, skittish Connor. Dawn's not being very sympathetic, but her pushiness finally does the trick in getting Connor to start focusing on his new roommate and her crap television shows and her shiny hair. I like the way he starts trying - combing his hair, asking questions, eating her food - and how it makes Dawn warm to him, though I bet she'd deny it up and down the block.
The movie marathon forgotten in the throes of Connor' enacting his real life adventures was vividly drawn and I love how the rush of the story and Connor's naked boy torso and chair slaying overwhelm Dawn. Connor may, indeed, out to be dangerous, but only to Dawn's teenage girl heart. It all made for a great read.
This line made me laugh out loud, too: I told him what was going on, is all. He was doing his lurky-starey thing under the tree the other night and I was bored so I made him help me with my Algebra. Bonus points that he's terrible at it!
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This scene made me laugh: "Just stop it, okay?" Dawn snarled, twisting around on the couch to glare at where Connor was half-inside the curtains, peeking out at the street and twitching every time somebody won something on The Price is Right. Poor, skittish Connor. Dawn's not being very sympathetic, but her pushiness finally does the trick in getting Connor to start focusing on his new roommate and her crap television shows and her shiny hair. I like the way he starts trying - combing his hair, asking questions, eating her food - and how it makes Dawn warm to him, though I bet she'd deny it up and down the block.
The movie marathon forgotten in the throes of Connor' enacting his real life adventures was vividly drawn and I love how the rush of the story and Connor's naked boy torso and chair slaying overwhelm Dawn. Connor may, indeed, out to be dangerous, but only to Dawn's teenage girl heart. It all made for a great read.
This line made me laugh out loud, too: I told him what was going on, is all. He was doing his lurky-starey thing under the tree the other night and I was bored so I made him help me with my Algebra. Bonus points that he's terrible at it!