Uhm, well, me again. Sorry to be flooding you with comments. I swear I'm usually not such a PITA.
Anyway, I just noticed that you asked people to point out any typos or stuff they noticed, so, I'm pointng out one I found. I wasn't going to, since I'd already pointed out the Hebrew thing, but I figure that if you asked then you must really want to know.
"Great, that's great." Sam bent carefully and shoved his head under the stream of water – yelped in shock. It was as cold as it could possibly be and not be frozen and it was like getting an ice-pick straight to the brain. "Jesus – fucking – C-Christ!" Water ran into his mouth and he sucked and swished and spat – finally turned his head and drank a little and then just hung their, his hair dripping and his forehead aching from the cold.
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Anyway, I just noticed that you asked people to point out any typos or stuff they noticed, so, I'm pointng out one I found. I wasn't going to, since I'd already pointed out the Hebrew thing, but I figure that if you asked then you must really want to know.
"Great, that's great." Sam bent carefully and shoved his head under the stream of water – yelped in shock. It was as cold as it could possibly be and not be frozen and it was like getting an ice-pick straight to the brain. "Jesus – fucking – C-Christ!" Water ran into his mouth and he sucked and swished and spat – finally turned his head and drank a little and then just hung their, his hair dripping and his forehead aching from the cold.